The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Tai diagram below depicts alterations that have happened at West
Park
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Secondary
School
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since its reconstruction in 1950. It can be seen that the playground remained the same size as
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school
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the school
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in 1950 and 1980.
Conversely
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, in
2010
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2010,
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the playground
reduced
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was reduced
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in
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by
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one third of its size. In the left empty
space
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a
sport
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sports
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field was shifted
decreasing
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, decreasing
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its size four times from 1980 to 2010.
Accordingly
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, farmland was removed and replaced by
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a
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sports field in 1980.
Also
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, the living quarter behind the main road was modified into
car
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a car
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park
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from 1950 to 1980. The science block was added between
car
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the car
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park
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and
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school
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the school
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1950
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in 1950
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.
Finally
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, the most significant change appeared in
car
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the car
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park
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, when it expanded
for
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apply
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about five times. Comparing pictures of 1950 and
2010
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2010,
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it is important to mention that the West
Park
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Secondary
School
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became
more
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a more
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comfortable place for drivers. The farmland
seem
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seems
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to be unnecessary.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park, school with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • renovation
  • expansion
  • modernization
  • infrastructure
  • landscape
  • facade
  • demolition
  • construction
  • alteration
  • amenities
  • accessibility
  • sustainability
  • curriculum
  • enrollment
  • pedagogy
  • architecture
  • commute
  • heritage preservation
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