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Band 1

Write an email to the sports coordinator. Give your suggestions about activities, awards, and ways to make the event more exciting. Write 120–150 words.

Dear Sports Coordinator, Thank you for asking
students
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 to share their suggestions for the upcoming School Sports Day. I would like to share a few ideas that could help make the event more enjoyable and motivating for everyone.
Firstly
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, you should
organize
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organise
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 competitive and fun activities
such
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 as relay races, football and volleyball matches. These games
very
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are very
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 useful for all
students
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.
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This
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These
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 races and
exercise
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exercises
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 help to improve their athletic ability.
As a result
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, children have
healthier
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a healthier
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 lifestyle and live longer.
Secondly
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, you should build
extra
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an extra
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 room where
students
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 can relax, because they run, jump and can
other
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do other
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 activities, and they
tired
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are tired
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after
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this
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 exercise.
In addition
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, providing small medals or certificates would make the achievements feel more memorable.
Finally
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, to make the day even more engaging,
organizing
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organising
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 a short music performance that
students
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 can dance
and
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to and
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 relax.

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structure
Plan your text with a clear start and end.
coherence
Use linking words like and, also, but, next to tie ideas.
grammar
Check grammar and fix wrong word use or form.
content
Add more details for awards and events, show time and who will do what.
style
Keep sentences short so the read is easy.
tone
The email is polite and fits with the task.
content
Ideas fit the topic and are easy to see.
examples
Medals and music idea are good choices.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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