IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The table below shows the percentage of households that own three types of technology (a smartphone, a laptop, and a smart TV) in three countries in 2010 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Data (percent of households): Country A: Smartphone 35 → 88, Laptop 55 → 72, Smart TV 12 → 60 Country B: Smartphone 28 → 81, Laptop 48 → 66, Smart TV 10 → 52 Country C: Smartphone 40 → 90, Laptop 60 → 75, Smart TV 15 → 65

The table illustrates the households that own three types of technology (a smartphone, a laptop, and a smart TV) in countries A,
B
Use synonyms
 and
C
Use synonyms
 in 2010 and 2020. Units are measured in percentage points.
Overall
Linking Words
, to use of all
gatget
Correct your spelling
gadgets
 increased in all countries. At the start of the given period most popular type of technology was laptops, but in the end it changed to smartphones.
According to
Linking Words
 the graph, smartphones in 2010 in countries A,
B
Use synonyms
 and
C
Use synonyms
 were 35, 28, and 40 per cent respectively.
Then
Linking Words
, it rose significantly, in A to 88, in
B
Use synonyms
 to 81,
in
Correct word choice
and in
show examples
C
Use synonyms
 to 90 points.
In contrast
Linking Words
, less needble smart divase TV comprised from 10 to 15 per cent in 2010, but rose from 42 to 50 per cent in the final year. When it comes to laptops in country A, it made up 55% at the beginning and 72%
at the end
Linking Words
 of the given chart.
Likewise
Linking Words
, in country
B
Use synonyms
consumption
Punctuation problem
, consumption
show examples
 of Laptops increased by 12% from 48 in 2020.
Finally
Linking Words
, country
c
Use synonyms
 accounted for 60% in the beginning and 75% after
10-year
Correct article usage
a 10-year
show examples
 period

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words b, c with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: