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Writing Samples
Band 4

With a fast pace of modern life more and more people are turning towards fast food for their main meals. Do you think the advantages outweighs the disadvantages?

With
fast
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a fast
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 lifestyle pattern
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, individual
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individual
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individuals
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attend
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tend
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 to eat quick
meals
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 more than before
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. This
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this
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is
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apply
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A
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apply
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will clarify why the drawbacks outweigh the advantages. People
consuming
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are consuming
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 outside
food
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 more because
it's
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it
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save
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saves
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 more time and effort
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however
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; however
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, in the long term
it's
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, it's
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coast
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costs
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expensive
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more
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value
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in terms
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on
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of
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 physical and mental health. People with busy life is style prefer to eat in
restaurant
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a restaurant
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 after
long
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a long
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 day full of
task
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tasks
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 and stress,
therefore
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 they
so
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apply
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like to enjoy their
means
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time
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 with their coworkers to save time
that
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apply
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spend
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spent
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 on
for
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apply
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the
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apply
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preparation
,
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. Moreover
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moreover
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, they define sharing
means
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meals
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 with their colleagues,
allow
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allowing
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 them to discuss
worker related
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work-related
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Shots
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issues
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 and solve work issues together. For
instant
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instance
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,
according
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to
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apply
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study
was
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apply
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published by the United States of America
that shows
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shows that
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 65% of
employee
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employees
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 depend on
take away
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take-away
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meals
Use synonyms
 during work hours.
On the other hand
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, junk
food
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,
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apply
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consider
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is considered
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 the first factor to deteriorate
the
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apply
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well-being. And other
word
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words
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 Diet with a high concentration of
carb
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apply
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saturated
,
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apply
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fat
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fats
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 and full of sugar may result high chance of mortality and morbidity. For
instant
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instance
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, the
boss
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apply
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majority of obesity related
disorder
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disorders
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,
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apply
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resulted
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result
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by over
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from
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eating
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overeating
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of
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apply
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unbalanced
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meals
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meals,
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that
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which
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cause
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can cause
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 a heart attack and high cholesterol in
a
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the
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 blood
additional
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addition
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 to
the
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apply
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mental
disorder
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disorders
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,
such
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 as
Alzheimer
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Alzheimer's
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 disease.
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This
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These
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 diseases cause
billion
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billions
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dollars
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of dollars
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annual
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in annual
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 on
the individuals and
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individuals and the
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 government. In conclusion, despite that less time and effort on fast
food
Use synonyms
, clean
meals
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 can be
safe
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a safe
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 and convenient solution to stay healthy and
a
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apply
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productive. For
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this
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these
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 reasons, I strongly believe that healthy
food
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is
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apply
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must be the first option and
government
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the government
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 should impose
tax
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a tax
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 on
the
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apply
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fast
food
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centers
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centres
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in additional
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additional
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addition
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 to
raise
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raising
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the
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apply
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public awareness
on
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about
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 the negative
outcome
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outcomes
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from
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of
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 bad eating habits that destroy
the
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apply
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physical and mental
condition
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health
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.

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structure
Plan your essay with a clear aim. Start with a short line that states your view. Then write two parts: one on good points and one on bad points. End with a short view again.
grammar
Keep simple and fix big grammar points. Watch subject and verb match, use period well, and spell common words right.
content
Use real facts or numbers to back up your idea, and explain why they matter to your view.
cohesion
Link ideas with small words like also, but, however, and for example to make the flow easy to read.
content
You show you think fast food has bad health and life effects.
content
You add a number (65%).
content
You try to give a solution, like a tax on fast food.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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