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Some people say that educational success most of the time depends on having a good teacher. Others say that student attitudes also do matter. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It has been discussed that a successful education depends on having a dedicated tutor,
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 others think that it is related to the pupil. I
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 believe that the
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 needs to motivate the
students
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 to engage in the subject. Regardless, the following essay will discuss both views. On the one hand, the effort that
students
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 put into their classes will be dependent on how the information is given by the lecturer. If the
teacher
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 understands that each of them has a different learning style, it is more likely that the lessons will have a greater impact.
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, the activities could be focused on visual, kinesthetic and auditory learning concepts. So all the
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 have a chance to develop where they excel the most.
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, they will be more interested, resulting in better learning and,
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, in the opportunity
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 succeed in their education.
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, it is well-known that having a successful career completely depends on the learner.
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, the tutor gives the facts, but the pupil decides what to do with them.
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, it can be the case where the
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 gives all the learning tools, but if the undergraduate does not have interest, it will be in vain.
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, the energy and discipline that the youth put into their lectures
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 will determine how successful their course will be.
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, it is clearly seen that both sides have equal importance. If the student does not put in enough effort, or if the
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 cannot connect properly with the class, it will hardly lead to a successful education.
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, I still believe that it depends more on the attitude that the professor has towards their learners, than the
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 motivation.

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cohesion
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph to show the main idea.
grammar
Fix spelling and grammar errors to keep the flow smooth.
task
Make your view clear at the start and again in the end.
examples
Add one or two more specific examples to back each point.
coherence
Use linking words to connect ideas in a easy path for the reader.
structure
The essay shows a plan to talk about both sides.
content
It has a clear view that the teacher can help students.
structure
The use of On the one hand and On the other hand helps guide the reader.
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