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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar diagram below compares the value of the international sales that
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have
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 been earned by five different categories during 2015-2016,
while
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 the table displays a
two
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two-year
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years
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changes
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change
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 of those
products
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 in terms of percentage value
at
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during
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 the same
periode
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period
. In general, a considerable profit
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resulted
by
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from
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 the petroleum
products
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 and the engineered goods.
In addition
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, textile exports have made a significant increase compared to other sales in the period in question.
According to
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 the chart, it can be seen that the petroleum
products
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 and the engineered goods contributed a noticeable
earning
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earnings
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 in the
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years
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years'
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 sales, amounting to 60
billions
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billion
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 dollars for each. Coming in second place, germs and jewellery made 20
billions
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billion
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 smaller by margin in 2015 and 2016.
By contrast
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, agricultural
products
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 and textiles were responsible for the least number of those
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figures, contributing merely half of
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the
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 highest
features
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figures
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 in the same period. Moving onto the table,
it is clear that
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 textiles made
a
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the
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 highest increase
of
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in
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 the international market, forming roughly a fifth after 2
years
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. Two other sectors received a minimal rise, 8.5% for engineering and 3% for petroleum
products
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.
Nonetheless
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, the least incline
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 by agriculture, which amounted to fewer than 1%.
Moreover
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, germs and jewellery
was
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were
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 the only
figure
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figures
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 that experienced a decline during the
years
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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