The chart below shows the percentage of household in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011

The bar chart illustrates the ratio of owning and renting dwellings in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
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the level of rented
accomadation
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accommodation
observed a downward trend, owned housing followed an upward trend.
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, the highest proportion allocated in the data is renting in 1918. Looking into details, in 1971, both of them levelled out at %50;
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, owner-occupied housing continued to increase slightly,
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, the housing system that gives the payment annually fell gradually until 2011.
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the end of the given period, owning
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accommodation
have
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a minor decrease of approximately %5.
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, renting housing went up by the same amount as other dwelling
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. Another key point to consider is that as for owning
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was absolutely identical
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1991 and 2001. Between 1939 and 1953, data reveal that referring renting
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similarly
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similar
proportion of roughly %69.

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