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The line graph below shows the consumption of 3 different types of fast food in Britain from 1970 to 1990. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the amount of three types of fast food
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as in
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hamburgers
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,
fish
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 and
chips
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, and
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pizza
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pizza,
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 consumed in Britain between 1970 and 1990, measured in
grams
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.
Overall
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,
fish
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 and
chips
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 and
hamburgers
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 experienced significant growth in
consumption
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 over the period,
whereas
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pizza
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 intake declined slightly before
stabilizing
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stabilising
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. By 1990,
fish
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 and
chips
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 had become by far the most popular fast food. In 1970,
pizza
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 was the most widely consumed item at approximately 300
grams
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,
while
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fish
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 and
chips
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 and
hamburgers
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 were eaten in much smaller quantities, at around 80
grams
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 and 40
grams
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respectively
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.
However
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,
pizza
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consumption
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 gradually decreased over the next decade, falling to about 220
grams
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 in 1980 and
then
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leveling
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levelling
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 off at just above 200
grams
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 by 1990.
In contrast
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,
fish
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 and
chips
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 showed a steady and dramatic increase. After rising moderately to about 150
grams
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 in 1980, its
consumption
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 surged to 300
grams
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 in 1985 and peaked at roughly 500
grams
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 in 1990. Hamburger
consumption
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also
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 followed an upward trend, climbing gradually from around 40
grams
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 in 1970 to just over 100
grams
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 in 1985, before rising sharply to nearly 300
grams
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 by the end of the period. In summary,
while
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pizza
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 lost popularity slightly,
fish
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 and
chips
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 and
hamburgers
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 became increasingly
favored
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favoured
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 among British consumers.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hamburgers, fish, chips, pizza, grams, consumption with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rise
  • grow
  • increase
  • go up
  • climb
  • steady
  • sharp
  • rise steadily
  • fall
  • decrease
  • drop
  • remain
  • stay
  • level off
  • peak
  • high
  • low
  • be higher than
  • be lower than
  • in the end
  • at the start
  • over the period
  • by 1990
  • from 1970 to 1990
  • more than
  • less than
  • compare
  • contrast
  • the most
  • the least
  • overall
  • during the period
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