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Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

In modern society, life has changed
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a great deal. especially in buildings.
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 includes how cities create housing areas. In recent years, some
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 utilise tools for taller buildings,
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 others use other tools for building on a wider
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 of land. Both
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 have significant
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. On the one
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 hand, in terms of the
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,
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 the first given data, there are proper
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 in building that have a large land.
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 may cause a shortage in
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area
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the area
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, the limitation of the parking
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 prime example.
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,
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 will increase the poor
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 means it will decrease the number of houses.
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, all these dramatic points show the
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, in terms of the
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,
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 the second given data, there are major
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 in building that have taller buildings.
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 could help
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 to live in a creative
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 number of homes will increase significantly.
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 the low cost of rent.
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. All these points demonstrate the positive outcome and the right future. In conclusion, in terms of
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 and
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, there are many smart ideas to solve the main issue.
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, the
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 recommend
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 government follow the right guidance for a positive result and a better life.
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, the taller building is better than the wider building.

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task
Make a clear view in the start and end. Say which way is better and why.
coherence
Link ideas well. Use simple words to show how one idea leads to the next.
structure
The essay tries to discuss both ideas and has a simple form.
content
Some real examples are used, which shows thinking.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban density
  • sustainability
  • public transportation
  • green spaces
  • community connections
  • overcrowding
  • economic implications
  • infrastructure impact
  • maintenance costs
  • carbon footprint
  • compact city
  • habitat destruction
  • greenhouse gas emissions
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