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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarize the information bt selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The line chart compares how the number of people living in cities
evolve
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evolves
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 over four particular countries between 1970 and 2040. In general, Indonesia and Malaysia report a significant change,
while
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and Thailand are relatively fluctuate during the period in question.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 those four nations will reach their highest population of their city by 2040. Taking a closer look at the
Indonesia
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Indonesian
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 trajectory, it can be seen that a noticeable rise
recorded
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was recorded
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 between 1970 and 2000, growing from 15% to 30%, after which
grew
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it grew
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 drastically to
a
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apply
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half by 2020, and will reach 10% higher by margin in 2040. Malaysia, in comparison, throughout 1970-1990 rose modestly, which formed 45%,
then
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 went up steeply to 70% in 2020. A modest
grow
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growth
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 yet significant, will exhibit during 2030-2040, which
are
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is
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 predicted to reach 80%, representing the largest number
compare
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compared
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 to other nations.
Moreover
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, Thailand reported a fractional rise during its first two decades, making up a third by 1990, before
then
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relatively
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remaining relatively
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 stagnant by 2020. Their residents living in a city are going to reach nearly
a
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apply
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half in the next 20 years, which will be the lowest portion
over
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of
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three
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the three
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 other groups.
Conversely
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,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 showed a series of ups and downs in their first four decades, after which
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it are
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are
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is
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 estimated to jump to
their
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its
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 highest level in 2040, comprising 50% as it was recorded in 1990.

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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "modestly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • population density
  • trend
  • percentage
  • urban population
  • actual data
  • predictions
  • steady increase
  • striking difference
  • projection
  • fluctuation
  • contributing factors
  • demographic changes
  • socio-economic development
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