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Band 4.5

Increasing the prices of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree? what other measures do you think might be effective?

The effective way to reduce
traffic
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 and pollution issues is by increasing the prices of petrol
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 my opinion, I disagree because there are different ways to reduce the problems by giving alternative solutions
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 as public transport, wider
roads
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. By offering public
transports
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transport
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, namely, Trains, buses and bicycles,
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 ensuring their safety,
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clean transport and providing a special discount for the elderly, students,
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 can help with the promoting of
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alternatives.
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 will give the people another way of
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 to their work, schools and public places just as easy and simple as their cars would be,
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 reducing
traffic
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, pollution and ensuring that the solution is for the long run without changing the gas prices and causing a new issue for the people who rely on gas. In trems of wider
roads
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, the
traffic
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 can be solved if the city would try and opt for incresing the sizes of their streets even by one or two lines can make a huge different which in time will help with the challenges at hand, alot of cities are currently doing the same
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 Riyadh did the same by increasing their
roads
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 and bridges namely ( the mualaag) which is now 2 lines bigger than before to help solve that problems and it went seccessfuly by 2025
traffic
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 was down 30%. In conclusion, there are ways other than changing the prices of gas to ensure better air quality and less
traffic
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,
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 as improving public transport and restructuring the
roads
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structure
Plan your essay. Put one clear idea in each paragraph.
structure
Make a short intro that says what you will discuss and your view.
language
Use simple and correct grammar. Use capital letters and period marks.
examples
Give one or two good examples to show how your idea works.
stance
You say there are other ways than higher petrol price.
ideas
You mention two big ideas: public transport and wider roads.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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