The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the Internet everyday from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentages of adults in the United Kingdom who used the
internet
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everyday
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every day
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between 2003 to
2006
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2006,
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divided
to
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into
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5 main
groups
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.
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, the younger
age
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groups
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used the
internet
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more regularly than the older
group
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.
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Also
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Also,
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internet
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use in most
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age
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ages
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during these four years. The 16-24
age
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group
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had the highest
internet
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usage throughout the years. It started at 80
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percent
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per cent
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in 2003, increased
100
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to 100
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percent
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per cent
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in 2005 and
then
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slightly
decrease
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decreased
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to around 90
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percent
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per cent
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in 2006. The 25-44
age
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group
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also
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showed steady growth
rising
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, rising
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from approximately 50
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percent
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per cent
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in 2003 to around 80
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percent
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per cent
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in 2006.
Furthermore
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, the 45-54
age
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group
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increased from 60
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percent
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per cent
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to around 80
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percent
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per cent
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over the same period. When comparing the adult
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group
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group,
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the 25-44 and 45-54
groups
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had very similar percentages by
2006
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2006,
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both got to 80
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percent
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per cent
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.
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, the 55-64 and
65 plus
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65-plus
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groups
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had much lower
internet
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usage
with
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, with
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about 50
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percent
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per cent
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and 20
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percent
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per cent
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in 2006.
This
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show
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shows
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that the
internet
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usage
decreased
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decreases
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as
an
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the
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age
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group
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increase
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increases
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words internet, groups, age, group, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • adults
  • age groups
  • Internet
  • daily users
  • increase
  • significantly
  • highest
  • lowest
  • rise
  • contrast
  • smallest
  • followed closely by
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