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The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age groups in the UK who used the Internet everyday from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart represents the percentage of adults in different
age
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 groups in the United Kingdom who used the internet from 2003 to 2006. The majority of
users
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 were young adults who
aged
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 between 16 and 24 years. In 2003 and 2004, they were at the same percentage, which was 80%. The following year, the bar suddenly increased to 100% and
reduced
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then decreased
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 to 90% in 2006. The
age
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 group 25-44 increased every year. Start at 50% to 80%, between 2003 and 2006.
Also
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 similar to the 45-54 group, they grew from 60% to 80% in 2003 to 20006. The
over 65s
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 had the lowest percentages. To
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, the ages between 16 and 44 were the most frequent
users
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 of the internet. The
users
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 of other
age
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 groups should use it as needed
according to
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 their
age
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and
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, and
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 the lowest active
users
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 were over 65s.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, users with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • adults
  • age groups
  • Internet
  • daily users
  • increase
  • significantly
  • highest
  • lowest
  • rise
  • contrast
  • smallest
  • followed closely by
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