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in some countries, people prefer to rent a house to live in, while in other countries people prefer to buy their own house. does renting a housr have more advantages or disadvantages than buying a house?

In recent years, people tend to live in a rented
house
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, rather than purchase their own.
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 in some countries individuals prefer buying a
house
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 to live in a rented one.
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, is that a good enhancement of humanity as living in a rented apartment, or does it have drawbacks?
To begin
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 with, buying a
house
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 requires a lot of investment,
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 not everyone is able to afford it.
Firstly
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, it is thought that having your own property makes you independent. As you do not have any obligation,
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 as payment for monthly rent.
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, people with low yearly income can not afford to get their own
house
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, so
it
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they
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leads
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have
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 to
a
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get a
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mortgage.
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, individuals pay the same amount of fees or even higher to the bank that they would pay for the apartment rental.
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, if a person can not pay back the amount of money they loaned from the bank, their
house
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 can be seized as collateral. Those disadvantages make
house
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 rentmen a good option. As in anytime people are able to break a contract and move to another flat, if the facilities which were provided in the previous apartment are not suitable.
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, in case of damage to some furniture, compensation will have to be paid to the owner for the loss, which adds to the cost. Another example is that if you were in a car accident, your kids won't inherit any property from you, as you do not have any. In conclusion, both options have advantages and disadvantages. Individuals need to decide whether the advantages outweigh over disadvantages and choose the appropriate option for them.

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task response
State a clear position on whether renting or buying is better, and stick to it throughout the essay.
structure
Give 2-3 main points for each side and link them with clear linking words.
content
Limit examples to stay relevant to the question (for example, focus on cost, maintenance, and flexibility).
grammar
Use simple grammar and short, clear sentences; avoid long, confusing sentences.
content
The essay shows both sides of the issue.
structure
Some points about mortgage and flexibility are used.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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