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The table below gives information about the average annual distance travelled by adults and the types of travel in 1977 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table describes how many
miles
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 are travelled by each adult per year, taking into account the different types of travel between 1977 and 2007. From an
overall
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 view, people frequently move by car or by taxi,
when
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apply
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compared to the past.
On the other hand
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, there is a decreasing trend
of
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in
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 bus or bicycle employment for travel. Looking at details, people
traveled
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travelled
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 most
part
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apply
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of
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miles
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the miles
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, respectively 3500 and 7100, during 1977 and 2007.
Therefore
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,
car
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the car
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 is the most employed vehicle and
,
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apply
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 distances
are
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have
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 more than doubled over
this
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 time period.
Miles
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 travelled by bus significantly decreased, from 800 in 1977 to 500 in 2007. 
Furthermore
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, a slight decrease
of
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in
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miles
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 by
bykes
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bikes
 or by motorcycle was observed.
Oppositely
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Oppositely,
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 there was a slight decrease
of
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in
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miles
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the miles
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 travelled by train.
Finally
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, there was a significant increase of people travelling by taxi, passing from 200
miles
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 in 1977 to 800
miles
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 in 2007. It can be concluded that
,
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apply
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car
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cars
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 and
train
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trains
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 are the most frequently
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used vehicle
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 of transport employed by adults for
tralelling
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travelling
,
while
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bicycle
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bicycles
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is
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are
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 the
less
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least
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 commonly used.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the seventh paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words miles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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