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In the modern world, many employees lack soft skills such as communication and working in teams. What are the main causes of this problem? What are the effects of the lack of such skills? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In my opinion, the reason of main
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 problem its causes about the rarely
communication
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 face to face or discussing with
work
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 friends in their
work
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 environment, since
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 digital era avarage people they usually used to working alone than working that need a soft skill
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 as
communication
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 like a waiters, diplomats, and much more, many people prefer to working alone because they can
work
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 easily just from with device all day especially with their laptop or their phone. So
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 problem will
effects
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affect
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of
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apply
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their soft skills
communication
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and
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, and
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 it
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will effects
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effects
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affect
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of
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apply
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their
work
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 team result .
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This problem
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 are actually relevant
of
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to
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myself
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me
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,
i
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 used to
work
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 alone
with
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for
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long
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a long
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 time, and when
i
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join
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joined
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 for the first time working on teams,
it
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feels
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felt
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like
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nervous and not good enough
to
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at
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communication
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communicating
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, so it will happen to gain their trust to people.

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task response
Plan your answer. Start with a simple map: causes, then effects, then a short end. Each idea should be clear and linked.
coherence
Use small links like and, but, because, so to join ideas. Begin each paragraph with the main idea.
content
You show you know the topic and give a real life example.
structure
You talk about causes and effects, not just one side.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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