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Solar energy is becoming more and more popular as a source of household energy in many countries around the world Why is this? What are the advantages and disadvantages of solar energy? Give reason for your answers and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Solar
energy
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 is a new
source
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 that
have
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has
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 been found since 1839 (Solar
Energy
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 Industries Association) and
now
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is now
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 used for household
power
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 in many
region
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regions
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.
This
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energy
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 comes from heat radiation and
sunlight
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sunlight,
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 transformed into
electricity
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 or thermal
energy
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. People
prefers
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prefer
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 solar
than
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to
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 water or wind because it's more efficient and compatible
on
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in
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 many
country
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countries
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.
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 there are pros and cons of solar
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energy
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energy,
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that
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it has
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 made buyers think twice before buying. The benefits we can get from
this
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technology
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is
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are
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 a renewable,
inexhaustable
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inexhaustible
power
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source
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. Many customers
says
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say
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when
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that when
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 they bought
solar
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a solar
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 panel and it helped their
electricity
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 bills
reduced
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were reduced
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about
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by about
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 50 to 90%,
many
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and many
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 homeowners
seeing
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see
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 immediate, significant savings (Enercon Indonesia). The
technology
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also
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significanly
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significantly
reduce
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reduces
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 carbon emissions, producing
electricity
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 12 to 20 times lower life-cycle
emission
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emissions
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 than fossil fuels (Infolink Consulting). Solar
energy
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 systems are widely
recognized
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recognised
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 for requiring minimal maintenance compared to traditional sources, primarily because they have no moving parts that wear out over time (Constellation). With that much profit we can get, there
are
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is
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also
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 a downside
on
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to
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this
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 new
source
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. The high initial installation costs are the first reason why people didn'
t
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 want to spend on
this
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technology
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, the money
spend
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spent
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 itself around $15.000 to $40.000 before
incentive
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incentives
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 (EnergySage). Intermittency
are
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is
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 the first problem because solar
technology
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 can'
t
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 constantly produce
energy
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, doesn'
t
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 produce
electricity
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 at night and
reduced
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cannot be used
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 or even
can'
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can't
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t
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make
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be made
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 when the weather is cloudy (CDS Solar). Even if we want to have
electricity
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 at night,
household
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a household
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 battery is the solution
but
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, but
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 they are expensive
around
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, around
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 $400 to $750
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, beacuse
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beacuse
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because
 it is the most expensive component
on
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in
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solar
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a solar
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 panel system that
store
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stores
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 the converted
energy
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into
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in
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 the battery for
the
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apply
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night time
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nighttime
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 or
power
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outage
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outages
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 (Enphase). The conclusion is
i
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I
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 highly recommend you
to
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apply
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buy
this
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energy
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source
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 because it's simple and more reliable in the future, if you have the money and want to save
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the earth
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earth
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Earth
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 from pollution. But if there are
also
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others
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other
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power
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 sources that
reliable
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are reliable
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like
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, like
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 windmill, watermill, thermoelectric generator and biomass. To save the earth and make it more
liveable
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livable
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 by renewing our
energy
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source
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 and
don'
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not
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t
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 contribute
on
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to
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destructing
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destructive
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activites
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activities
 that
make
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wreck
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 our home
wrecked
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apply
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.

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Task response
Make a clear plan. Answer both why solar energy grows and give more on the good and bad sides. Add one or two strong facts from reliable source.
Coherence and cohesion
Use a clear paragraph for each idea. Start with a short intro, then two or three body para, and a simple conclusion. Use easy link words like and, but, also, so.
content
The essay shows pro and con ideas.
content
It uses some numbers and examples.
structure
It has a clear start, body and end idea.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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