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The given line chart depicts the number of students who studied in universities abroad from 3 countries The US The UK and Australia over a period of 5 years from 2002 through 2007.

The line graph describes the
number
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 of
University
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students
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 studying abroad from three different
counties
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countries
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, in the period ranging from 2002 to 2007. From an
overall
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 view,
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number
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the number
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 of
students
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 from
US
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the US
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 is the highest one
while
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,
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apply
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university
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students
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 from Australia represented the smallest
number
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. Looking at details,
students
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 frequenting
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University
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universities
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 abroad coming from Australia were 10000 in 2002
and
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, and
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, line graph shows that
this
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number
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 was the same
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untill
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until
 2007.
On the other hand
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, 50000
students
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 from the US studied abroad in 2002.
Thereafter
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,
this
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number
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slighly
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slightly
 decreased
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untill
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until
 460000 in 2004, with a subsequent recovery
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untill
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until
 50000 in 2007.
Finally
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,
students
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 attending
university
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 abroad from the United Kingdom
were
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was
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 3000 in 2002 and 2003.
Thereafter
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, there was a progressive decrease
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untill
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until
 22000 in 2007. It can be concluded that the Australian and American trends are quite similar,
while
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 the UK line is different.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "thereafter, while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, university, students, untill with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • increase
  • increased
  • increasing
  • rise
  • rose
  • rising
  • grow
  • grew
  • growing
  • up
  • fall
  • fell
  • falling
  • decrease
  • decreased
  • decreasing
  • down
  • upward
  • plateau
  • stable
  • stable
  • trend
  • trends
  • number
  • numbers
  • students
  • US
  • UK
  • Australia
  • country
  • countries
  • paraphrase
  • compare
  • contrast
  • overall
  • year
  • years
  • period
  • describe
  • show
  • patterns
  • growth
  • change
  • year-by-year
  • gradually
  • suddenly
  • significant
  • notable
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