IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

In some countries people prefer to rent a house rathar than buying one .describe tha advantages and disadvantages of both?

Renting houses has become more popular in recent years. In some parts of the world the people prefer living in a rental
house
Use synonyms
 and not
live
Wrong verb form
living
show examples
 in an
owened
Correct your spelling
owned
house
Use synonyms
. I think
this
Linking Words
 because of the high prices of accommodation. First of all, paying a monthly rent
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
is not convenient in the long term, but if
some one
Use the right word
someone
show examples
doing
Verb problem
is doing
show examples
 it for only a period of
time
Use synonyms
, it will be a good choice.
How ever
Use the right word
However
show examples
renting
Punctuation problem
, renting
show examples
 a
house
Use synonyms
 is a good
think
Use the right word
thing
show examples
 if you are not
planing
Use the right word
planning
show examples
 to stay
a
Change preposition
for a
show examples
long period of
time
Use synonyms
. Because some people travel to another country for work or study in
this
Linking Words
 situation, renting is the right choice. Second of all, living in an
ownd
Correct your spelling
own
house
Use synonyms
 is a big responsibility
becouse
Correct your spelling
because
 it's
on
Change preposition
in
show examples
 your name. And you must fix
any think
Use the right word
anything
show examples
 on it.
but
Fix capitalization
But
show examples
 if you are in your home
country
Punctuation problem
country,
show examples
 you must start thinking about moving out when you start to work. In
term
Fix the agreement mistake
terms
show examples
 of
Use synonyms
time
Punctuation problem
time,
show examples
 2-3 years, your savings will buy you a small apartment or even give it as a deposit and
continyou
Correct your spelling
continue
 to
paying
Wrong verb form
pay
show examples
 it in the next years rather than the rent.
To conclude
Linking Words
if
Punctuation problem
, if
show examples
 you are staying out of your
country
Punctuation problem
country,
show examples
 it will be better to rent
and
Punctuation problem
, and
show examples
 you will be under the
owner
Check wording
owner's
show examples
responsiplety
Correct your spelling
responsibility
.
but
Fix capitalization
But
show examples
 if you are planning to stay a long
periodof
Correct your spelling
period of
Use synonyms
time
Punctuation problem
time,
show examples
 it is better to buy
Punctuation problem
. Yes
show examples
yes
Punctuation problem
yes,
show examples
 you will pay more, but when you sell
it
Punctuation problem
it,
show examples
 your money will be saved and it will
icrease
Correct your spelling
increase
by
Change preposition
over
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
time
Use synonyms
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

planning
Plan before you write. Make a short intro that says your view. Then two body parts with one main idea and a short detail. End with a clear view.
content
You try to talk about both rent and buy.
structure
There is a short ending.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: