The pie charts show information about energy production in a country in two separate years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, by make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs
provides
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data about energy output in a land in 1995 and 2005.
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, it can be clearly seen that
,
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gas, coal and
petro
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petroleum
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approximately 90 per
cent
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of all in 1995. Another striking feature is that only nuclear and other witnessed
an
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significant upward trend. Looking at the detail, as regards petrol, coal and gas
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, every
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every
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of them accounted for almost one-third at the beginning of the period in question
and
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, and
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first
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the first
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two
section
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were the same in 2005.
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, Petro declined considerably and was 20 per
cent
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in
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this
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year.
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, when it comes to other and nuclear, it went in the opposite direction. Nuclear had around six per
cent
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in 1995, but it experienced considerable growth to one-tenth in the second year.
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, other
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very
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a very
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similar pattern, but it was from a mere five to nine per
cent
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "considerably" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • increase
  • decrease
  • production
  • energy source
  • fossil fuels
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable energy
  • comparison
  • major/minor changes
  • phased out
  • introduced
  • contribution
  • total energy output
  • environmental impact
  • economic impact
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