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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

On a recent holiday you lost a valuable item. Fortunately, you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter explain the you lost • tell the insurance company what you would like them to do

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter in connection with an
item
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 I lost during my recent trip to Japan. I have already done
insurenace
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insurance
 for the same from your company. The
item
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 I have lost is an HP
laptop
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 model X2500 of silver colour
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along
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, along
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 with its charger. I have recently purchased the
laptop
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 and
has
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have
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 not used
much
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it much
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. The
item
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 was lost during the flight transit
and
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, and
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 the airport authorities are unable to trace the
item
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. My trip was on 13th June
and
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, and
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 I have filed a
compliant
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complaint
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 for my lost
item
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and
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, and
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 I am in regular contact with them. But they have
npt
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not
 received the
item
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till
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to
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 date.
The
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They
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 have already insured the
laptop
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 with your company
and
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, and
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 my policy number is OG-234567
and
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, and
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 the insurance is valid for one year
upto
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up to
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 15.
May.
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May
2027. I would like to
initate
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initiate
 a claim process
of
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for
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 my
laptop
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. Please let me know about my claim procedures. I am enclosing my insurance policy copy
along with
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laptop
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the laptop
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 invoice copy with
same
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the same
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. Hope to hear from you soon Yours faithfully Mary Bruno

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grammar
Fix spell and grammar. Words like insurenace, compliant and npt are wrong.
structure
Make one idea per paragraph. Split the letter in parts: what was lost, policy, and what you want now.
task response
Be clear about what you want. Say you want to start a claim and ask for the steps to take.
tone
Keep a formal tone and use short, easy words.
accuracy
Check dates and numbers; match them with papers you have.
greeting and closing
Good greeting and closing are used.
content
Policy number and dates are given.
task response
You tell what you want: to start a claim.
documentation
You say you will send copies of papers.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable possession
  • insurance claim
  • misplace
  • irreplaceable
  • receipt
  • policyholder
  • reimbursement
  • coverage
  • claim number
  • deductible
  • documentation
  • authenticate
  • liability
  • premium
  • accidental loss
  • indemnity
  • beneficiary
  • contact details
  • substantiate
  • correspondence
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