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Band 4.5

On a recent holiday you lost a valuable item. Fortunately, you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter explain the you lost • tell the insurance company what you would like them to do.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter with regard to my
laptop
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which
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, which
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 I
have
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apply
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lost during my
last
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 holiday trip to
Maldives
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the Maldives
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 from 24th February- 29th February. The
laptop
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has
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apply
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was kept
at
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in
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 my hotel room
and
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, and
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 I
have
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went to
hotel
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the hotel
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restuarant
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restaurant
for having
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to have
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return
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a return
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. Having
returing
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returned
 back I found the
laptop
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 was not there. It was 14
inch
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14-inch
 HP X4500 with silver colour , and I
have
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purchased the
laptop
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 on 14th January of
this
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 year. I am enclosing the invoice copy of the
laptop
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also
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 as
attachment
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an attachment
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 to
this
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mail
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email
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. The
laptop
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 did have
lot
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a lot
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 of confidential data related to my work and my financial statements
and
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, and
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 I have
aleady
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already
 filed a police
compliant
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complaint
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 and blocked all my bank cards. The
laptop
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 was insured with your
compnay
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company
and
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, and
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 I understand that I may receive the total
laptop
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 value as
claim
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a claim
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. I request you to kindly let me know the
further
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 procedures for the claim settlement. Hope to hear from you soon Thanking You Yours faithfully Angel Merin

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language
Fix big grammar and spelling errors. Use simple past tense for the loss (I lost) and clear wording.
structure
Break the text into two or three short parts. Start with what was lost, when and where; then say what you want the insurer to do.
content
Add policy details like policy number, claim number, and amount you want to claim; and describe any proof you have.
organization
Be clear and keep one idea per paragraph.
spelling
Correct common spellings: 'hotel', 'restaurant', 'police report', 'company', 'invoice'.
structure
Formal tone with a proper greeting and closing.
content
You note the bill/invoice is attached and that a police report was made.
content
You mention steps you took to protect your money (cards blocked).
Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable possession
  • insurance claim
  • misplace
  • irreplaceable
  • receipt
  • policyholder
  • reimbursement
  • coverage
  • claim number
  • deductible
  • documentation
  • authenticate
  • liability
  • premium
  • accidental loss
  • indemnity
  • beneficiary
  • contact details
  • substantiate
  • correspondence
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