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The line graph shows the numbers of participants for different activities (film club, martial arts, Amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performance) at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

The line graph shows the numbers of participants for different activities (film club, martial arts, Amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performance) at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
The line graph illustrates the
numbers
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number
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 of
participants
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 for different activities (film club, martial arts, Amateur dramatics, table tennis and musical performance) at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia
for
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, for
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 the period 2000 to 2020.
Overall
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,
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of
participants
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 table tennis group grew
up
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apply
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sharply between 2010 and 2020
Linking Words
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, by
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by
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in
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 contrast
dramatics
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dramatic
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 group
which
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, which
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 decreased steadily and
reaches
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reached
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lowest
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its lowest
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participants
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the
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in the
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 final year. In 2000
numbers
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number
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 of
participants
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 film club recorded
highest
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its highest
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 point at approximately 65 members, but decreased following years before recovering in 2020
,
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;
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same
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the same
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 fluctuation
had
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occurred in
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 Martial
arts
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Arts
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members
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, members
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. In 2005
members of
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of members
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musical
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in musical
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performance
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performances
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grow
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grew
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 steadily
through
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from
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 2005 to 2010 and
reaches
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reaching
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 19
participants
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Linking Words
In
Punctuation problem
. In
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contrast
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contrast,
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 amateur
dramatic
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dramatics
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which
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apply
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decreased from 29 to 9
participants
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 95%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words participants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "numbers of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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