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Band 5

The flow chart illustrates the consequence of deforestation. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The chart provides key information about the outcomes of deforestation and how badly it
effects
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affects
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 the environment.
Linking Words
overall
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Overall
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, deforestation leads to several environmental problems, including flooding, increased drought, and less biodiversity.
According to
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 what is shown, heavy logging equipment compresses the
soil
Use synonyms
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 leads to
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soil
Correct article usage
the soil
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 becoming hard
,
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. As
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as a result
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,
rain water
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rainwater
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 runs off
causing
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, causing
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 flooding, and with fewer roots
hold
Verb problem
to hold
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 the top
soil
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 in causes the top
soil
Use synonyms
 to
erodes
Wrong verb form
erode
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. In addtion, increased risk of burning deliberate or accidental,
as well as
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 plants returning less moisture to air. eventually all of these reasons
leads
Correct subject-verb agreement
lead
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 to several consequences, more
specifically
Punctuation problem
specifically,
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 less biodiversity.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words soil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flow chart
  • consequence
  • deforestation
  • process
  • cutting down
  • loss
  • forest cover
  • wildlife habitat
  • disruption
  • ecosystems
  • soil erosion
  • water quality
  • release
  • carbon dioxide
  • atmosphere
  • contribute
  • global warming
  • climate change
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