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You are living in a University Residence, and you have a problem with the high levels of noise from a new campus restaurant which is open late at night. Write a letter to the Governor of the University. In your letter, Complain about the situation Say why this is a problem And Propose ways reduce the noise.

Dear Sir, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing
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 letter to express my concern about the newly opened
restaurant
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 on the University
Campus
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, which stays open until midnight. I am Sam,
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a second
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second year
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second-year
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 student of the Business Administration program at your
campus
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. Undoubtedly, the addition of a
restaurant
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 in
new
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the new
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campus
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 is accessible and convenient for students
but
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, but
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 at the same time, it creates
high
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a high
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 level of noise.
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, I can clearly hear the honks of delivery trucks,
moving
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the moving
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 of chairs and tables, and the songs played by the
restaurant
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 till late at night. The noise made it hard for me to sleep and focus on my studies. My room is very close to
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 new
campus
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, and it made me feel tired
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the whole day.
Due to
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 the sleep deprivation, my health is affected, my grades dropped, and I performed fair in my final exams. I humbly request
you
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that you
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to
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take effective measures to address
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 issue. You can ask them to comply with the rules and regulations of the University, or ask them to install sound
proofing
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soundproofing
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 system to control the voice, set the delivery date and time for trucks, and revise the opening and closing
timing
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 of
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restaurant
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the restaurant
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. Looking forward to hearing from you soon! Yours faithfully, Sam

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task response
Say the problem in a more clear way in the first part.
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Give one or two more clear ways to fix the noise problem.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like also, so, and because to join ideas more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each sentence short and clear to make your meaning easy to follow.
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You answer all parts of the task.
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Your tone is polite and right for a letter to the Governor.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph mostly has one main idea.
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