Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some believe that this information may be relevant and useful. While others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that it is important for bosses to have some clue about applicants' personal lives.

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essay will discuss both views before presenting my own opinion. On the one hand, some firms might think it is important to be a good person as much as being enough for educational needs.

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, in many movies, directors need to be married to have a commercial , or

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is evidence of being a loyal person.

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advice may show the execs that they are suitable for the jobs

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their personal lives. And for the job applicants,

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approach gives importance to outside life.

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, they feel more welcomed and have boundaries.

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, others argue that it is not relevant to have individual data for firms.

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may make people feel like they are not enough academically. Having facts like these is not meaningful for administration.

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, if an individual is enough to get accepted to a company but not getting into just because of their hobbies, it makes them furious and shows an unacceptable excuse. In conclusion,

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some people believe that personal info about

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applicants can help authorities understand candidates better, others argue that

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details are irrelevant to professional abilities. In my opinion, execs should mainly focus on applicants’ skills and qualifications,

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personal knowledge should only be considered when it is clearly related to the business.

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Answer both sides more fully. Your view is clear, but the first side needs a stronger reason.

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Use examples that are real and fit the job topic better. The movie example feels weak.

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Explain your main ideas more. Some points are short, so the reader wants more detail.

coherence and cohesion

Your essay has a clear start, body, and end. Keep this plan.

coherence and cohesion

Link some ideas more smoothly. A few sentences feel hard to follow.

coherence and cohesion

Make sure each paragraph has one clear main idea and support for it.

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You discuss both views and give your own opinion.

coherence and cohesion

The introduction and conclusion are both present and clear.

coherence and cohesion

The essay is split into clear paragraphs.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

239 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

hobbies
interests
relevant
useful
cultural fit
collaborative settings
stability
reliability
discrimination
biases
hiring process
unconsciously favor
unfair hiring landscape
job performance
professional attributes
assessment
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