The table below shows how the UK unemployed spent their time last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows a comparison of unemployed people in the UK spending their morning and
afternoon
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time
in
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over
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a
one year
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period.
Overall
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, doing
housework
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dominated the activities,
while
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drinking in daylight became the least thing they did during the period. In the morning, doing
housework
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dominated
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women’
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women’s
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activities at 49% followed by shopping,
while
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job hunting stayed in third priority.
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, playing sports and drinking were the least
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apply
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chosen
to do
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in the morning by unemployed
women
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in the UK.
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, most
men
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in the morning were doing job hunting at 22% and followed by shopping at a slightly different percentage at 20%,
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then
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and then
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the third priority for
men
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is doing
housework
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. But similar to the
women
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, the
men
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also
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did not choose to drink in the morning. The percentage of activities in the
afternoon
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for both
women
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and
men
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were
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was
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considerably even.
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most
women
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were still doing
housework
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in the
afternoon
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,
men
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mostly chose to watch TV.
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, none of the
women
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stayed in bed or played sports in the
afternoon
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,
while
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the
men
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also
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chose to stay in bed at
the
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least.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words afternoon, housework, women, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • spend
  • spent
  • time
  • last year
  • unemployed
  • most
  • least
  • share
  • percent
  • percentage
  • activity
  • types of activity
  • work
  • job search (if shown)
  • leisure
  • sleep
  • hours
  • overall
  • in general
  • more than
  • less than
  • as well as
  • also
  • but
  • however
  • similarly
  • whereas
  • than
  • equal
  • noted
  • big
  • small
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