The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart illustrates the
prices monthly change
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monthly price changes
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on average
of
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for
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three different kinds of metals in
a
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the
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year
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period of 2014.
Overall
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, in the
begining
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beginning
of the
year
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, nickel
strated
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started
at the highest point
,
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apply
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compares
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compared
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to the other two materials.
Whereas
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,
in
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at
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the end of the
year
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, all three metals came to almost the same page. In the trend of nickel price change, it is obvious that it has a dramatic drop from 6% to -3% in the first half
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year
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of the year
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but
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, but
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it has climbed up slowly to 1% in the end. Despite that, it still has a stable stage for three
month
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months
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, from July to September. During the whole period of time, copper and zinc
has
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have
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relatively mild fructuation and they both end up rising closely back to the point where they
strated
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started
.
Although
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zinc
also
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has
fructuated
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fluctuated
slightly from 3% down to -1
%
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%,
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when copper only has an approximately 2.5% of difference.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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