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Writing Samples
Band 5

You are going to another country to study. you would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter Give details of your study plan Explain why you want to get a part time job Suggest how your frined could help you find a job.

Dear Fenil, I hope you are in radiant health. The reason for writing
this
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 letter is to ask for your help
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which is to find
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in finding
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 me a part-time
job
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 in your country. As I mentioned in my
last
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 letter,
that
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apply
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I applied
in
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to
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 the
Toronto University
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University of Toronto
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 for my diploma. Well, I am happy to share that
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 I got my acceptance letter today, and I am planning to shift there by next month.
However
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, I checked my course outline, and I noticed that
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 most of my lectures are in the morning. So, I was thinking
for
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of
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 getting a part-time
work
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job
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, which I can do in the afternoons or evenings
ever
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every
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 day. Having a
job
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 will help me cover
to
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my daily expenses, and I can
also
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 save some portion of it to pay my college fees.
However
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, I would really appreciate
,
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 if you
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could suggest
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me
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any websites or links which can help me to get a
job
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.
Also
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, you can refer
my
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to my
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 resume at your current
job
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. Looking forward to
hear
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hearing
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 from you soon. Yours truly, Darshan

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Answer all parts with a bit more clear detail.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph hold one main point only.
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Use clear link words like also, so, and because.
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Ask for help in a more direct and clear way.
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You answer all three parts of the task.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear opening and ending.
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The tone is friendly and polite.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are easy to follow most of the time.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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