The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and the plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps demonstrate the current state of the Islip town centre and its future reconstruction plan. In general, it is apparent that the major modernisation will take place in the town centre, with improved infrastructure and facility are the main concerns. At present, a motorway
lies
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runs
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from the west to the east,
there
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and there
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also
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are also
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two blocks of
shop
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shops
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alongside the road. They have two housing
zone
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zones
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in the southern part, next to a park and a school. A countryside,
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, is situated in the northern part. In the upcoming redevelopment map, the highway will be converted
for pedestrian-street
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into a pedestrian street
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only,
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a dual carriageway
is
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will be
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designated
encircle
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to encircle
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the entire city.
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, one of
commercial
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the commercial
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block and the countryside are estimated to be replaced by a bus station, a shopping centre, a car park, and
new
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a new
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housing area. A new residential area will
also
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be erected on the south site
,
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;
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hence
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, the park will be reduced in size.
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, the school and the prior housing site will maintain their initial locations.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pedestrian-only zone
  • dual carriageway
  • current
  • surrounded by
  • propose
  • infrastructure
  • bus station
  • car park
  • residential housing
  • traffic flow
  • connectivity
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • development plans
  • main features
  • town center
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