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The graph below shows that the percentage of Austra export to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

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illustrates
 the percentage of Austra export to 4 countries
Japan
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: Japan
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,
US
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the US
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,
China
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 and India between 1990
to
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and
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 2021
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,
China
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 had the highest climb rate out of all the other countries
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, meanwhile
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, India had the lowest
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increasing
 rate. In terms of
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china
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China
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, in 1990
China
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 only had 0
exports
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 from Austra and in 1995 it started
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rising
 slowly. But in
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2000,
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China
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China's exports shot
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exports
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 shoot up and from 10 to 30
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, reaching
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 its peak
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, and
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 overtook the
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US
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 and Japan.
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 in
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India
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 they had a noticeable downward trend from 1900 to 2000
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 around 2001 they had a slight chance and rose from
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0
 to around 8 in
exports
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 in 2010
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apply
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,
in
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but in
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 2011 they decreased to around 5
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, levelling
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 up with the US.
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 in 1990 Japan where in there highest point around 25
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, in
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in export
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apply
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and after that
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they
 had a
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minimal drop
 from 1995
till
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to
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2012
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2012,
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by having
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dropping from
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 20 to
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apply
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around 18
exports
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.In the
US
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US,
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 there is a
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fluctuating
 trend
in
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1990
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1990,
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 the
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 had 10
exports
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and
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, and
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 in
1995
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1995,
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 they decreased to around 9
exports
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 and rose again in 2000
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, making
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 them 10
one
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once
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 again
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 they had a huge decline in 2005 reduce them from 10
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 to only 5 in 2010
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 2010 to
2012
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2012,
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 the US stayed stabil tell 2012 by having around 5
exports
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 7 times.
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