The line graph below shows changes in the amount and types of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

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transformations
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the transformations
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how
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in how
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much and sort of junk food
eaten
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is eaten
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by
Australian young
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young Australian
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adults over
25-year
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a 25-year
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period between 1975 and 2000.
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, it is evident that
when
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apply
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pizza and hamburgers increased considerably,
whereas
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fish and chips experienced a noticeable fall over the period in question. In 1975, the hamburgers
eaten
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were eaten
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15
times
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, and
this
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was followed by a considerable
rose
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rise
to 100
times
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in 2000. When it comes to pizza, it was just started at 5
times
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in 1975, and
this
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figure
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increased dramatically to 85. After
that
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that,
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this
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figure
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leveled of until 2000.
By contrast
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, fish and chips were eaten 100
times
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in 1975, but
this
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figure
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fluctuated until 1985. In 1990,
this
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figure
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experienced a noticeable fall over the period in question.

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