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As a part of a class assignment you have to Millions of people every year move to English-speaking countries such as Australia, Britain or America, in order to study at school, college or university. Why do so many people want to study in English? Why is English such an important international language? give reasons for your answer.

The growth in
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 of people immigrating to
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-speaking nations raises 2 important questions.
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what is the reason that a large part of
population
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the population
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 wants to study in
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.
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Second,
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why is
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such
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 an important international
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.
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 essay will address both and provide explanations. Regarding so many people looking to study in
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 is true because
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 nowadays is represented as a status symbol. To explain it
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, schools in India have made
in
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 mandatory for students to learn
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 and teachers are often heard quoting that one can not be considered educated if they are weak in
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, not only citizens of countries like India but
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 the governments
prioritize
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prioritise English
english
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 more than their own national languages.
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, so many job interviews are conducted in
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, road signs and food packaging labels are
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 printed in the same
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. Concerning the cause that
English
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 has become one of the most important international languages, there are some reasons stating the cause.
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, it is
majorly
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the only
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 that helps
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 globally and
emits
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eliminates
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 any
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 barriers. People who wish to study or travel to other nations find it easy to survive if they know
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.
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 to that,
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the internet
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 and social media
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play
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 a vital role in influencing
masses
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the masses
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. It is evident that someone making videos or posting vlogs in
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 gets more views or likes
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apply
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compared to another person doing it in a regional
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This
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 directly impacts the rise in
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English-speaking
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the English-speaking
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 population.
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, framing a
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to be
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as
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 a dignity symbol and social media influence are primary causes of
this
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 issue.

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task response
Answer both questions more fully. Your main ideas are there, but some parts need more depth.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph.
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Support each main point with one clear and direct example.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more smoothly. Some sentences feel too long or not fully connected.
coherence and cohesion
Write a stronger conclusion that clearly sums up both questions.
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You answered both parts of the question.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
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You use examples from real life, such as India, jobs, and social media.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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