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You recently booked apart-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking. Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter ·say which part-time course you booked ·explain why you need to cancel your booking ·ask about booking a different course You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows： Dear Sir or Madam,

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to
apply
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request
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 the cancellation of
part-time
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the part-time
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 course which I recently booked
Last
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 week, I booked a basic cooking class,
this
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 class requires students
attend
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to attend
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 every Tuesday
,
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.
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 I thought it might be ideal for me, because
the
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apply
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Tuesday is my dayoff of my permanent job. Unfortunately, I just suddenly got noticed
from
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by
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 my manager, he told me
because
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that because
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the
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Christmas is
comming
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coming
 soon, they need more workforce during
high-peak
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the high-peak
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 period. I was asked to work one more day, and he decided to put me on Tuesday
,
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;
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this
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 is the reason why I must change my plan.
Although
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 I will not be able to learn cooking, I am
also
Linking Words
 interested in baking
,
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.
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 I saw there is a baking course for
beginner
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beginners
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 on Saturday
, is
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. Is
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 it still available? I really like learning kitchen things. I
apologize
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apologise
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 for the inconvenience
of
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caused by
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 my issue. Thank you for your time and consideration
,
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. I
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 hope to hear from you soon.

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coherence cohesion
Say your reason in a clear way with short lines.
coherence cohesion
Use simple link words like first, so, and, but.
task achievement
Answer all three points fully with one clear ask at the end.
task achievement
Use a more formal tone, like I would like to cancel my booking.
task achievement
You wrote about the course you booked.
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You gave a clear reason for the change.
coherence cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph has one main idea.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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