The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

In summary, achievement at work has the largest impact on happiness of both age groups. Both charts have a similar distribution, with some
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remaining the same, like hobbies and job success, and others differing, like having a good appearance and travelling
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are replaced with financial
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security
and family in the older cohort. In the younger population, leisure activities and more superficial
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, like appearance, seem to
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their
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happiness
.
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the inexperience of the younger community, and those things seeming more important in that stage of their life. Excellence in a person's field and performing fun extracurricular
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activities
are the two highest impact
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on their happinness
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, sharing
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with the elders. In the older group, the aforementioned travel and
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physical
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are replaced by more serious matters. With age comes wisdom, and it seems the people of greater age
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that those
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joy-inducing activities and
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do not matter as much for long-term
happinness
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happiness
. Hobbies and professional success maintain their spots as the top two things that make people happy in both charts. In conclusion, the main contributors to
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joy remain the same
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doing hobbies and
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achievement
at work. The lower
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percentage sections of the chart
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change from one population to another, but the general proportions remain similar.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words factors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • age groups
  • responses
  • happiness factors
  • participants
  • contribute
  • compare
  • patterns
  • differences
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