Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Other think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many

individuals

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individuals,

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when they get a

job

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that pays them

well

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well,

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decide to keep

for

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it for

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their life.

This

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create

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creates

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a sort of comfort zone where the worker feels

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home

also

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if he's working. Working several years for the same company or in the same place

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apply

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would help the employer to

develope

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develop

specific skills that he can use at his

working place

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workplace

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, people who

works

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work

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as a waiter or chef in a

resturant

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restaurant

after 10 years of work he will know exactly the kind of customers the

resturant

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restaurant

has and all the expenditure behind it.

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Moreover

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people who

works

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work

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for their entire life in

place

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one place

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have more chances to get an important role inside the company,

for example

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, they can become head of department or CEO

instead

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of being a classic seller. But looking at

other

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the other

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side

changing

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, changing

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your

job

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periodically can be a good strategy as well. There are plenty

stories

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of stories

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about people who changed their

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job

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jobs

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after one year and got a lot of

benifits

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benefits

This

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because

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is because

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companies look for employers with

expirience

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experience

in that field.

Everytime

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Every time

they were changing

job

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the

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, the

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companies were offering them different

contract

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contracts

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with higher work positions

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;

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however

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, in

this

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case

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case,

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the jump from

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one

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position to another

become

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became

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easier

, the

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. The

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workers

do not

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no longer

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wait for a promotion

anymore

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apply

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because they can get it just by finding another

job

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. In my

opinion

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opinion,

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I would

rater

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rather

change organisations during my life, because

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this

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, I

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way, I

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can get more

expirience

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experience

and learn how to adapt myself in different

enviroments

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environments

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task response

Answer both sides in a more even way. You write about both views, but the second side is shorter and less full.

task response

Give your opinion more clearly and a little earlier, not only in the last line.

task response

Add one more clear example for the view about changing jobs. This will make your ideas stronger.

coherence and cohesion

Use a clear paragraph plan: first view, second view, then your opinion.

coherence and cohesion

Link ideas with simple words like 'first', 'also', 'on the other hand', and 'in my view'.

coherence and cohesion

Make sure each main idea has a short explanation. Some points are good, but they need a little more support.

task response

You discuss both views and give your own opinion.

coherence and cohesion

Your ideas are easy to follow most of the time.

task response

You use examples from work life to support your points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

256 words

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Longevity
Corporate ladder
Adaptability
Comfort zone
Professional network
Diverse skill set
Industry exposure
Innovation
Resilience
Seniority
Job market
Career trajectory
Company culture
Professional growth
Job security
Promotion prospects
Cross-functional experience

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