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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure center that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter: •give details of how you and your friends or family use the center •explain why the sports leisure center is important for the local community •describe the possible effects on local people if the center closes

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to show
the
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concern about
shutting down
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the shutdown
 of Tim Sports Complex
,
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in Toronto. I am a local resident of
this
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 area and many of my family members and other friends visit
this
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 sports
center
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centre
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 frequently to use all the
amentities
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amenities
 it offers. I am a
state level
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state-level
 badminton player
and
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 atleast go there 4-5 days a week with my friends . My parents ,both in their late sixties ,
visits
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visit
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this
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 place for an evening walk on the indoor track
which
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 keeps them fit and healthy.
Importance
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 of
such
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 places in the crowded areas of the city cannot be ignored . It is an everyday leisure place for most youngsters and
old age
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older
 people as there are no parks available in the vicinity .
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, it
also
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 serves as a community
center
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centre
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 to organise public and personal events at discounted rates
to
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for
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 the
locality
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local
 people. In any case , if the proposal
of closing
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to close
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this
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center
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centre
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 is approved, localities would be at a great loss. The
elderlies
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elderly
 would not be able to enjoy their free time
and
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 the youngsters would be forced to stick to mobiles with no option to play . I hope you will pay attention to
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 matter. Yours
Faithfully
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, Leo Torress

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add one more clear detail about how often your friends or family use the center.
task response
Task response: Keep the tone a bit more formal. For example, use 'I am writing to express my concern' and 'the local community' instead of more casual words.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear order, but some ideas can link better. Use words like 'Firstly', 'In addition', and 'As a result'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Try to keep one main idea in each paragraph. This will make your letter easier to follow.
task response
Task response: You cover all three bullet points from the task.
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Task response: You give real and clear examples about you and your parents using the center.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has an opening, body paragraphs, and a clear closing.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Most ideas are easy to understand and follow.
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