The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given diagram describes the process
how
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of how
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bamboo
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is became
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becomes
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fabric
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.
Overall
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, the process consist of nine stages, beginning with planting
bamboo
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in spring and culminating in the production of finished
fabric
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and clothing.
Firstly
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,
bamboo
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plants are planted in spring
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then
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, and then
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plants
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they
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are harvested in autumn.
After
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this
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,
harvest
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the harvest
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cut
Verb problem
is cut
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into strips,
eventually
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and eventually
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strips are crushed to make liquid
pilp
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pulp
. At that time, long fibres are filtered with seperating from
liquid
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the liquid
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.
In contrast
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, after that five stages
bamboo
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plants turned into fibres.
Furthermore
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, fibres are softened by adding water and amine oxides.
Following
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this
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, yarn is made by spinning
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then
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it
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,
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fabric
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and fabric
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is made by weaving.
Finally
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,
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last
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the last
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product of clothes is made at nineth stage. Nine staged production step is required
for
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to
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make
fabric
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clothes.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bamboo, fabric with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bamboo
  • fabric
  • cloth
  • fiber
  • yarn
  • thread
  • weave
  • knit
  • stages
  • steps
  • process
  • harvest
  • cut
  • crush
  • break
  • fiber
  • spin
  • weave
  • finish
  • wash
  • dye
  • color
  • soft
  • strong
  • material
  • final
  • make
  • from
  • to
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