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The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates how young people in four countries (The UK,
The
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 United States, France,
Italy
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and Italy
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) prefer
transport
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 in a single year.
Overall
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,
most
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the most
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 preferred
mode
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 of
transport
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 in almost all four
country
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countries
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 was
car
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the car
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 among the young generation, except in France, where they prefer bicycles.
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, for other modes of
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transport
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transport,
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 every country showed a different pattern among them.
Firstly
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, in the
Uk
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UK
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, cars were the most preferred
mode
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 of transports around 60%, followed by the
bicycle
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 at 30%, and the least used
mode
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 of
transport
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 was
bike
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the bike
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 at 10%.
Secondly
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,
In
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in
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 the United States, the most used modes of
transport
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 were cars among young people around 60%, followed by
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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 at 30%, at
last
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bicycle
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 at 10%. In Italy, cars were
highest
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the most
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 used
transport
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around
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at around
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 75%,
highest
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the highest
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 among all countries, followed by
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 at 11%, and the least used
mode
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 of
transport
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 is
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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 at 9%.
On the other hand
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, in
France
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France,
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 young people prefer
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 as a
mode
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 of
transport
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 at 45%, followed by
car
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cars
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 at 40%, at
last
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 motorcycle at 11%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, mode, bicycle with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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