The bar chart below shows transport preferences among young people in four countries in a single year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates how young people in four countries (The UK,
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United States, France,
Italy
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and Italy
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) prefer
transport
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in a single year.
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,
most
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the most
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preferred
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of
transport
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in almost all four
country
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was
car
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the car
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among the young generation, except in France, where they prefer bicycles.
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, for other modes of
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transport
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transport,
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every country showed a different pattern among them.
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, in the
Uk
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UK
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, cars were the most preferred
mode
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of transports around 60%, followed by the
bicycle
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at 30%, and the least used
mode
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of
transport
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bike
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the bike
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at 10%.
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,
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the United States, the most used modes of
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were cars among young people around 60%, followed by
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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at 30%, at
last
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bicycle
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at 10%. In Italy, cars were
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used
transport
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around
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75%,
highest
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the highest
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among all countries, followed by
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bicycle
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bicycles
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at 11%, and the least used
mode
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of
transport
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is
motorcycle
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motorcycles
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at 9%.
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, in
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France,
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young people prefer
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bicycle
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bicycles
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as a
mode
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of
transport
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at 45%, followed by
car
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cars
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at 40%, at
last
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motorcycle at 11%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, mode, bicycle with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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