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Band 1

You should spend 40 minutes for this task Some people think that older employees bring more value to a company. Others believe that younger employees are more beneficial. Discuss both views and give your opinion. You must

The class starts
at
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on Monday at
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 monday 18.00 Since you would like to get in shape and start a workout journey, I suggest
tennis
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that tennis
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 will be the perfect activity for you.
Also
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 Its a good way to meet other individuals and make friends and do a
sosical
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social
 activity together.
Moreover
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, we could sign up together and do
this
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activiety
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activity
 on a weekly basis.
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Furthermore
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 it will help your wrist, which has become so
stiff
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stiff,
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to losen
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loosen
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 up.
Althought
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Although
 it might be hard in the
beginning
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beginning,
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 our
bodys
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bodies
 will thank us
afther
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after
 a
while
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.
This
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 is our chance to get in shape
and
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, and
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 I suggest that we take it.
Privious
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Previously
 I
palyd
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played
 tennis in my younger days
and
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, and
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 I remember
It
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it
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 gave me so much—
both
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apply
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new friends, challenges, and a sense of achievement. Anyways Im looking forward
for you
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to your
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 reply xx your best
frinend
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friend

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Write a clear start. Say why you write and what class you mean.
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Answer all parts of the task. Give time, place, and a clear reason for your choice.
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Add one or two clear examples. This will make your ideas stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Put each new idea in its own paragraph. This will make the text easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use link words with care. Words like also, moreover, and however should fit the meaning.
coherence and cohesion
Check the order of ideas. Move from class time, to reasons, to ending.
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You give a clear main idea: tennis is good for health and new friends.
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You include one personal example about tennis in the past.
coherence and cohesion
The text has an ending with a friendly tone.
coherence and cohesion
Some link words are used, like moreover and furthermore.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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