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The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into high education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart compares the percentage of female students entering universities in 1980 and 2015 in five different countries: The UK,
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 USA,
Australia
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, South Korea, and France.
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, the rate of women entering higher education in every nation seemed to be on the rise, except for
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Australia
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Australia,
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 where the proportion remained the same in both years. To start with, in the UK, 35% of women went to higher education in
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 before increasing to 55% in 2015.
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, in the USA, 48% of females went to university in 1980, and the rate grew to about 58%, reaching its peak in 2015. As for
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, it is noticeable that the country had the highest number of girls moving into college in both years at approximately 58%.
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, 15% of ladies in South Korea moved to higher academies in 1980, and 30% in 2015. The figures were the
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 in the rank among all the countries in question. As for France, the rate of ladies going into higher school was just slightly under that of
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, at 50% in 1980 before improving to approximately 52% in 2015.

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