The bar chart on the right gives information about the number of students studying Computer Science at a UK university between 2010 and 2012 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the number of
students
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,
both
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British
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and International, who study computer science at a UK university, from 2010 to 2012.
Overall
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, there was a greater
attendance
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of local than international
students
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at the university.
Furthermore
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,
this
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disparity was higher among the
females
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over the three years,
whereas
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there was only a significant gap between the males in the first year.
In addition
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, more males attended than
females
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. With regard to the
British
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and international male pupils, in 2010, 40 English men studied Computer Science, almost twice as many as their non-national counterparts.
However
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,
this
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was the only year the disparity was wide. The following year, the
attendance
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of
British
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home males dropped, and
both
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recorded 20,
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in 2012, there was a peak
attendance
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for
both
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British
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at 42 and Foreign
Students
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at 38. Concerning the female Computer Science
students
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, more than twice as many were from Britain. In 2010, 30
British
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females
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were studying the course,
while
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only half as many foreigners were in
attendance
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.
While
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interest in the course reached its apex for
Bristish
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British
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home
females
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at approximately 45
both
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years, there was only marginal growth in the figures of International
females
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, which was around 20 in 2011 and 2012.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, both, british, attendance, females with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • number
  • students
  • studying
  • Computer Science
  • increase
  • significant
  • lowest
  • highest
  • period
  • trend
  • popularity
  • courses
  • year
  • recorded
  • interest
  • growing
  • few
  • reach
  • peak
  • comparison
  • feature
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