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Some people are born to be a leader,others believe that leadership can be learned. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no denying the fact that people seeking to be leader as our community is require.
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 it is a commonly held belief that
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individuals
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, there is
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 an argument that people consider that
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leadership
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 skills they can learned.
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand, geneatic is play a crucial role for
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, children when they
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 the had character similar once
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 family.
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, each family have streangh aspects, like strong body, inteligeance and habits.
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, several studies
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person
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 they starting to build themselves by improving
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 skills. It is
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person
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 aspect and they can improve it.
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, nobody
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 born with communication and confident skills
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difficult experiences
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 had faced. In conclusion, there are no easy
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answers to
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 question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that individuals
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have to build themselves by facing the problems and every
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single
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are confident
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 will
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increase
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task response
Answer both sides more clearly. Say why some people are born leaders and why others can learn leadership.
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Give your opinion in a clear way in the body, not only at the end.
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Use one clear example with simple detail to support each main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph about one main idea only.
coherence and cohesion
Use easy linking words well, like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects well to the next one.
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You discussed both views and gave your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You used some linking words like on one hand and in conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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