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The graph shows the amount earned by graduates of different age groups in 2002. It includes those with a degree, those with a higher degree (postgraduate) and those with other qualifications.

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The graph depicts the dependence of the amount earned weekly by graduate employees on their
degree
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 and
age
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 for 2002. The first key feature shows that
this
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 figure is the lowest among those with a first
degree
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, no matter the
age
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.
However
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, it displays a generally positive trend, starting at £350 for
21-
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21-year-olds
year
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olds
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, reaching a maximum value of almost £700 for 36 to
45
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45-year-olds
year
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olds
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 and varying slightly around £690 for the rest of the
age
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 groups included in the study.
On the other hand
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, the most notable fluctuations occur in the earnings per week of people with other qualifications.
For people
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People
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 at the beginning of their twenties
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apply
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 represent approximately £415, the highest value to be observed for
this
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 category. As the
age
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 grows, they increase sharply, culminating at almost £820 for
38
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38-year-olds
year
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olds
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,
then
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 experience a significant decrease, dipping to a little over £690 for 56 to
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60-year-olds
year
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olds
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. The salaries of postgraduates stay between the values for the previous two types of
degree
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 for most of the
age
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 groups, but they become equal to those corresponding to a higher
degree
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 for
48
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48-year-olds
year
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olds
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 and surpass them for those aged 52 and older.
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, earnings of full-time graduate workers show an upward trend. The difference between them varies significantly,
its
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with its
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 peak value being the triple of its minimum.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words degree, age, olds, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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