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Band 6

You have decided to leave your current job even though you enjoy it. Write a letter to inform your manager of your decision. In your letter: • Tell the manager about your decision and the reason for it • Describe what you learnt in your current job • Ask the manager to write a reference letter to help you with future employment.

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Dear Mr.Jackson I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to formally inform you of my decision to leave my position as an engineer.
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 was a difficult decision for me, because I have worked hard for a long
time
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 and learned valuable experience so much from my boss and my colleagues. When it comes to the reason, I would like to apply for another position in the company,
such
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 as a manager. I believe
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 is the right for my personal life and to spend a lot of
time
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 with my family. During my
time
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 here, I have learned many skills,
such
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 as communication, knowledge and experience. I would be very grateful if I had been a part of the company for a long
time
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. Thank you again for your support when I was an engineer at the DNT company. Yours sincerely, Mr. Tien

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task response
Say your reason more clearly. You want a new role and more time with family, but this part is not fully clear.
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Ask for a reference letter in a direct way. This point is missing now.
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Use a more formal and clear tone in some lines.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each paragraph and link ideas with simple words like also, because, and finally.
coherence and cohesion
The ending is polite, but one sentence before it is unclear and should be rewritten.
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You clearly state that you want to leave your job at the start.
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You include what you learned in the job, such as communication and experience.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear opening and closing.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas follow a basic order: decision, reason, learning, thanks.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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