The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given table and pie charts indicate the cause of
land
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degradation
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in some specified regions and
overall
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around the world. We will clarify the
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distance
and the scale of influence on each area. At a quick glance, it is obvious that the 3 main reasons causing
land
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degradation
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are deforestation, over-cultivation and over-grazing.
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, over-grazing has had the most effect on the issue, holding the percentage of 35%, followed by deforestation at 30% and over-cultivation at 28%.
On the other hand
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, in the given area, each factor caused a different scale of
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.  In Oceania, the main reason that caused
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was over-grazing, which 11.3% effectiveness,
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the
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degraded
land
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to 13%.
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in Europe, the area that underwent the largest
land
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degradation
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condition compared to other areas, the main cause was recorded to deforestration,
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9.8% to the total of 23% in
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region. Meanwhile,
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North America, it is notable that
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region is handling the issue better than others
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the total degraded
land
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at 5%.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words land, degradation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pie chart
  • Table
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Decreasing productivity
  • Reasons
  • Regional variations
  • Data
  • Summarize
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