The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

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beneficial
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really mind in quality of productivity
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they usually think about how efficient and effective
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that working all week is strange, they used to do that.
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opportunities
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career.
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, there was a survey in
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companies
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products
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that they manufacture
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production in these
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workers less creativity
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evironment
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environment
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family, relatives, friends and society,
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long weekend.
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in the question, because
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daily routine
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and people can'
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give thier surronding right due.

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Make your main answer very clear in the first part. Say clearly that you agree, and keep this same idea in all body parts.
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Add more clear support for each main point. Explain how a shorter week helps workers and companies in a simple step-by-step way.
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Use one real and clear example for each body part. Your UK example is hard to understand, so make examples short and direct.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each body part. Do not mix work life and social life in the same point.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words well, like First, Also, For example, and In conclusion. This will make your ideas easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Make each sentence connect to the next one. Some parts now jump too fast, so the reader can get lost.
task response
You answer the question and give a clear opinion: you agree with a shorter work week.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic shape with an opening, two body parts, and an ending.
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You try to give reasons about work and family life, which helps show your ideas.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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