bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart provides information about the percentage of three sectorsagriculture ,industry and services
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contributions to India’s total production value between 1960 and 2000.
Overall
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showed services experienced an upward trend ,
while
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agriculture showed a downward trend throughout the period .
However
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, industrıe’s
contribution
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showed a gradual increase . At
teh begining
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the beginning
of the period ,agriculture
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a vital role,
contribute
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contributing
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to the development of India by around
62%.in
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1970,the chart showed a moderate decrease to about 55% and continued to decline steadily to the end of the period ,reaching around 45% in 1980 and 30 % in 1990. Hitting a low point of about 37% in 2000. In 1950,industry and Services start similar level
approximately
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15% ,and
services
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contribution
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increase to about 7% in 1970 ,
while
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contribution
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the contribution
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to industry
around
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was around
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20%. They are following each other and
reached
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have reached
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just under 30% .
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, next
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make a substantial
contribution
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to India ,about 45%in 1990 and continued to increase steadily ,
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industrie’s
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industry’s
contribution
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doesn’t change throughout the decade .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words contribution with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • farming
  • services
  • industry
  • share
  • part
  • sector
  • grow
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
  • become
  • biggest
  • largest
  • smallest
  • gradual
  • steady
  • sharp
  • period
  • from
  • to
  • by
  • over
  • in
  • 1960
  • 2000
  • gap
  • balance
  • trend
  • pattern
  • compare
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