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Your landlord has increased the amount of rent you pay every month and you don’t find it appropriate. Write a letter to the landlord and in your letter, Explain why you are writing Describe why you find the increase inappropriate What you want to do now

Dear Zara First of all i will introduce myself
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 My name is Kann
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,
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 living in room number 167, i writing to inform you about the expenditure of
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hesitate
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hesitation
 that you had increased in
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the
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 past
mounth
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month
. So
i
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I
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 am concerned about the rent that you
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have increased
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 every mounth it will be
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an effect
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 for you employee bacause
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 locatetion have not facilitate and puclic transpotation that i
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cannot afford
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 more than that
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 reason
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I chose
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 your landlord
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is because
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 of
amount
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the amount
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 of rent
the
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apply
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you sale do not expensive
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, but
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 right now i thing if you will cotinuously increased the rent of
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your
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 landlord i think many people will getten off from you hesitate.
and personnally i
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And personally I
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agee
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in agreement
 with other people.
so i
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So I
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 would appreciacte if you
reconsiderate
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reconsider
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 carefully because
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it
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 will
bad
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be bad
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 for
you
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your
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 business in the future for sure best regards Kann

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task response
Say why you write in the first line in a clear way.
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Give two clear reasons why the new rent is not right.
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Say clearly what you want now, for example ask the landlord to keep the old rent or talk with you.
coherence and cohesion
Use short paragraphs. One paragraph for each main point.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with easy words like because, so, but, and.
coherence and cohesion
Put your ideas in a simple order: reason for letter, why the rise is bad, what you want next.
coherence and cohesion
You wrote a clear opening and ending.
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You tried to answer all three parts of the task.
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You gave some reasons about transport and lack of services.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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