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The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world between 6 countries which is North America, south America, Europe, Africa, Central Asia, and South East Asia.

The pie chart demonstrates the proportion of water which is for distinct products in 6
territory
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territories
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 (North
America
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,
south
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South
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America
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, Europe,
Africa
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, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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.
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)
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, Agricultural
use
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 is the most common water
which used
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use
 in 4 other countries (South
America
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,
Africa
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, Central
Asia
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, and South East
Asia
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.
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However
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 in Europe and North
America
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 Industrial
use
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 is the most chosen
one
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. In
Africa
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, South East
Asia
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 and Central
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Asia
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Asia,
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 there is a very similar percentage in all
kind
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kinds
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 of water. The amount of usage for Agriculture is 84%, 88% and 81% respectivelly. The Domestic
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same
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the same
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 in
South East
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Southeast
Asia
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 and Central
Asia
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with
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, with
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 7%, and the second
chosen
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most common
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one
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 in 2 purposes (Central
Asia
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 and
Africa
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). In
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Africa
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Africa,
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 Industrial
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 is 7%
and
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 in South East
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Asia
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Asia,
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 number increased to 12%. In North
America
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Europe
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Europe,
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 the Industrial
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 is the most selected
one
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 with 48% and 53%
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while
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, while
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 in South
America
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the
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last
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one
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with
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is with
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 10%. In South
America
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 Agriculturel is the most useful with 71%
and
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, and
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 in
other
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the other
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 2
countries
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countries,
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this
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 purpose was in the middle between Industrial
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 and Domestic
Use
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words america, africa, asia, use, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • illustrate
  • percentage
  • purposes
  • areas
  • regions
  • agriculture
  • industrial
  • domestic
  • disparities
  • dominance
  • dependency
  • contrast
  • developed
  • analysis
  • living standards
  • population density
  • geographical
  • climatic conditions
  • sustainable
  • challenges
  • managing
  • resources
  • effectively
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