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The table below illustrates the employment statistics in Australia in 2000 and 2020, and a forecast of employment figures for 2040. Summarise the information by reporting and selecting the main features of the graph and making appropriate comparisons where relevant.

The table gives information about statistics of employment
people
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 in Australia in 2000 and 2020, and employment
figures
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 predictions for 2040.
Overall
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, the
figures
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 for employed
people
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,
job
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vacancies
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, and both male and female
earnings
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 show an upward
trend
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,
while
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number
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the number
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 of unemployed
people
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 and
hours
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 worked per week show a downward
trend
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. The table
also
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 presents predictions for 2040, where most
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figure
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figures
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 will
be
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apply
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increase, except
indicators
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for indicators
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 for
house worked
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housework
. Concerning the
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figure
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figures
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 presented for employed
people
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,
job
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vacancies
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, male and female
earnings
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 per year, they all demonstrated
upward
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an upward
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trend
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 from 2000 to 2020. The indicators started at 2.2
million
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 for employed, 16,750
of
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for
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job
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vacancies
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 and $18,000 for male and $14,500 for female
earnings
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. After that
indicators
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, indicators
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 rose to 2.8
million
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, 24,670, $21,000 and $18,000 in 2020.
While
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 the
figure
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 for unemployed
people
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,
hours
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 worked per week have a downward
trend
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. They started at 5.9
million
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 for
unemployed
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the unemployed
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 and 39.8
for
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million for
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hours
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the hours
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 worked in 2000.
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Subsequently
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Subsequently,
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figures
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 fell to 5.3
million
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 and 38.7 respectively. As for
prediction
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the prediction
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 about
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figure
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the figure
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 in
2040
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2040,
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 all
figures
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 will
be
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apply
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increase, except
number
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the number
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 of working
hours
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 per week. The number of employed
people
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 is projected to reach 3.8
million
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,
while
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unemployed
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the number of unemployed
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 rise slightly to 6.0
million
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.
Job
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vacancies
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 are
also
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 predicted to increase to 30,000. Both male and female
earnings
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 will reach to $25,000 and $23,000
respectively
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, respectively
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. Meanwhile, the average
hours
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 worked will
be
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apply
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decrease to 38.0 in 2040.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, figures, job, vacancies, earnings, trend, hours, figure, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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